-"WO JAB AATI HAI"-

by kamal aggarwal on February 20, 2011, 03:43:10 PM
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main  jaha  bhi  jaati hoon  wanhi chali aati hai
kabhi   chedti   hai   to  kabhi  gudgudati  hai
hamesha  machalti  hai  jab bhi paas aati hai
na  din  ko  sookoon hai na raat ko nind aati hai
jub bhi sone  jaati  hoon wo  mujhe jagati hai
jub  bhi  mujhe  koi  thokar si lag  jaati   hai
jara sambhalkar  chal  wo  mujhe  samjhati hai
agar  main  kahi bhi  koi jakham   khati  hoon
amanat  hoon   aapki  wo  mujhe  batati  hai
gar   koi  dard  mujhko   pareshan  karta  hai
aankhon  se   ashq  ka   dariya  nikalta  hai
thandi   hawa-si   aakar wo  use  sukhati  hai
baar-baar  ek   hi   baat   wo   dohrati  hai
yu   na  tu  khud  ko   pareshan   kiya   kar
teri siskiyan kisi par  bijliyan  girati hai
jub  kabhi   meri   aapse   baat   hoti   hai
dil  aur  dimaag  ki  haalat  kharab  hoti hai
tanhai   jub   bhi   mere   paas  hoti    hai
aapki   tasweer   aankhon   me   hoti   hai
kabhi-kabhi  hoton  pe  muskan  bhi  aati hai


AAP BHI SOCHTE HONGE AISA KUB-KUB HOTA HAI?
YE SUB TUB HOTA HAI JUB AAPKI YAAD AATI HAI!
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«Reply #1 on: February 20, 2011, 04:05:16 PM »
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kamal ji ---
bahut saara iskiya khumaar to hai aapki post me.
lekin kuch dout hai wo clear nhi hua.
anyways dil se daad hazir h ji
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«Reply #2 on: February 20, 2011, 04:15:20 PM »
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nirala ji pehle aapka doubt clear karle fir aapki daad kabul karenge. to kahiye kya shikayat hai?
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«Reply #3 on: February 20, 2011, 04:29:25 PM »
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main  jaha  bhi  jaati hoon  wanhi chali aati hai
kabhi   chedti   hai   to  kabhi  gudgudati  hai
hamesha  machalti  hai  jab bhi paas aati hai
na  din  ko  sookoon hai na raat ko nind aati hai
jub bhi sone  jaati  hoon wo  mujhe jagati hai
jub  bhi  mujhe  koi  thokar si lag  jaati   hai
jara sambhalkar  chal  wo  mujhe  samjhati hai
agar  main  kahi bhi  koi jakham   khati  hoon
amanat  hoon   aapki  wo  mujhe  batati  hai
gar   koi  dard  mujhko   pareshan  karta  hai
aankhon  se   ashq  ka   dariya  nikalta  hai
thandi   hawa-si   aakar wo  use  sukhati  hai
baar-baar  ek   hi   baat   wo   dohrati  hai
yu   na  tu  khud  ko   pareshan   kiya   kar
teri siskiyan kisi par  bijliyan  girati hai
jub  kabhi   meri   aapse   baat   hoti   hai
dil  aur  dimaag  ki  haalat  kharab  hoti hai
tanhai   jub   bhi   mere   paas  hoti    hai
aapki   tasweer   aankhon   me   hoti   hai
kabhi-kabhi  hoton  pe  muskan  bhi  aati hai


AAP BHI SOCHTE HONGE AISA KUB-KUB HOTA HAI?
YE SUB TUB HOTA HAI JUB AAPKI YAAD AATI HAI!
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Very Sweet & Simple ... Very touching .. Kamal Ji !

Good expression ... dil se daad !!!!!!!!!
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«Reply #4 on: February 20, 2011, 04:35:51 PM »
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thanku anshumali ji
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«Reply #5 on: February 20, 2011, 05:29:11 PM »
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haanji mera dout hai ki--iss post ka character male hai ya female !!
coz har ashaar me maximum 'aati hai ' yani female indication hai.
mera jada dimaag nhi h so confuse ho gaya --
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«Reply #6 on: February 20, 2011, 10:24:53 PM »
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BAhut Khub Kamal Ji
Per Nirala Ji Jo Kah Rahe Hai Wo Bilkul Sahi Hai
Aap Ne Jo Character Pakda Hai Wo Samjh Nahi Aa Rha Hai
Kya Aap Isse Clear Karenge

main  jaha  bhi  jaati hoon  wanhi chali aati hai
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«Reply #7 on: February 20, 2011, 10:40:13 PM »
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Rishi ji---samjh gaye hum Usual Smile
aakir hum itne naadan to nhi!!
inka jawaab last line me maujud hai.
aur character to female hi hai.
' yaad ' ko badi safai se Kamal ji ne har aashar me ek khubsurat character banaya hai.
wah Kamal ji aap Kamal nhi Kamaal ho.
confuse kar dia aapne --
sach kaha hai dosto ne ( nirala has no Bheja Usual Smile )
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saanse leta hun to teri yaad aati hai
saanse na lu to meri jaan jaati hai
kaise kah du saanso se zinda hu
arre saanso se pahle bhi to teri hi yaad aati hai
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thanx
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«Reply #8 on: February 21, 2011, 08:58:04 PM »
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thanks both of u nirala ji and rishi ji

nirala ji jara sambhalkar aji starting ki line "mein jaha bhi jaati hoon wahi chali aati hai"

aur last ki line"aap bhi sochte honge aisa kab-kab hota hai" se pata chal jata hai ki charater female hai ji
haan agar aapko kisi ki yaad aati hai to aap aise shuru kar sakte hai "mein jaha bhi jata nhoon"
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«Reply #9 on: February 21, 2011, 09:19:01 PM »
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kamaal hai ji
aapke post me dout kis baat ka tha ji.
hame to no dout.
sirf daad daad aur daad dikhai dia ji
be happy
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«Reply #10 on: February 21, 2011, 09:44:18 PM »
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Bahut khoob kamal ji yakinan kisi se bepanah mhbt karne k baad usse bichad kar yahi haal hota hai...
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«Reply #11 on: February 21, 2011, 09:56:25 PM »
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dil se shukriya KB JI and BBL JI aapka bhi
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