~.. Hansta hua sa maiN

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«Reply #15 on: August 23, 2012, 01:20:38 AM »
bahut bahut sunder
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«Reply #16 on: August 23, 2012, 06:44:27 AM »


veriiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii naaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaice


bhayee fir se aapka comment padha .... to aapne is sher pe
rone lagi kuch aise jyuN darya mai ho ufaan
chup chaap dekhta raha sahra hua sa maiN

sahma kahne ka ishara kiya hai shayed..

bhayee sahma kahne se ais alagega jaise wo ro nahi rahi ho cheekh rahi ho. aur mai dar ke mare saham gaya hun

jabki mera kahna yuN hai ki ........... wo dariya si rone lagi mai sahraa( registaan) sookhe sa dekhtaa raha ...

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«Reply #17 on: August 23, 2012, 06:59:44 AM »
niiiice
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«Reply #18 on: August 23, 2012, 04:19:25 PM »
good composition
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«Reply #19 on: August 23, 2012, 05:47:03 PM »

bhayee fir se aapka comment padha .... to aapne is sher pe
rone lagi kuch aise jyuN darya mai ho ufaan
chup chaap dekhta raha sahra hua sa maiN

sahma kahne ka ishara kiya hai shayed..

bhayee sahma kahne se ais alagega jaise wo ro nahi rahi ho cheekh rahi ho. aur mai dar ke mare saham gaya hun

jabki mera kahna yuN hai ki ........... wo dariya si rone lagi mai sahraa( registaan) sookhe sa dekhtaa raha ...



 sahra ko aapne apni soch se derive kiya as a dryness, non-effective  shayad.phir bhi huzoor ye line mujhey clear nahin hui. aap behter hoga mazeed explain kar lein.

dear janumanu ji, sehra mein sirf dryness nahin hota . per jab ek sandstorm chalta hai to poorey environment mein tabdili aati hai. islye main apni samajh se agar aapke iss misrey ko consider karoo.n to .....uske roney ka asr aisa hua aap pe jaise registaan yani sehra mein ek toofaan aa gaya . isliye meri nazar mein ye kuch jamaa nahin. maaf karein mujhey ghazal , nazm vaghairah likhna to nahin aataa  aap jaise logo.n ki tarah per haan jahaan doubt ho zaroor poochta hoon. meri baat ka buraa mat maaniye .
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«Reply #20 on: August 24, 2012, 01:43:49 PM »
sahra ko aapne apni soch se derive kiya as a dryness, non-effective  shayad.phir bhi huzoor ye line mujhey clear nahin hui. aap behter hoga mazeed explain kar lein.

dear janumanu ji, sehra mein sirf dryness nahin hota . per jab ek sandstorm chalta hai to poorey environment mein tabdili aati hai. islye main apni samajh se agar aapke iss misrey ko consider karoo.n to .....uske roney ka asr aisa hua aap pe jaise registaan yani sehra mein ek toofaan aa gaya . isliye meri nazar mein ye kuch jamaa nahin. maaf karein mujhey ghazal , nazm vaghairah likhna to nahin aataa  aap jaise logo.n ki tarah per haan jahaan doubt ho zaroor poochta hoon. meri baat ka buraa mat maaniye .
Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile

bhayee jab koe sher kahtaa hai to.... apne khyal pe kahtaa hai... na ki doosre k khyaal se Usual Smile

ab aap kahe ki sahraa main sirf dryness ni hota aur bhi kuch hota hai.... to ye to ajeeb baat huee.......... ab maine sher mai kya kahna hai ye to mai taye karungaa aur sher ka mafhoom kya hai....

ab ye bhi baat clear karUn ... to shayri ya mujhe nahi karni chaiye yaa apko nahi

sher ka maanhi sher se nikalaa jata hai. na ki usme apnaa khyaal thop diyaa jata hai .........

\sher yun hai ki

rone lagi kuch aise jyuN daryaa mai ho ufaan .

yaha mai daryaa ke ufaan ki bata kar raha hun....

chupchaap dekhtaa raha sahra hua sa main

aur yaha ye ki mai use ek mare hue sookhe hue registaan sa dekhtaa raha ........

ab aap isme apne hi khayal dal de to ye to jydadti hai..shayar ke sath hai ki nahi...

buraa manne ki baat nahi hai... mujeh pata hai kiski bata ka kitna asar lena hai...



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«Reply #21 on: August 24, 2012, 01:55:30 PM »
good composition

shukriyaaaa
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«Reply #22 on: August 24, 2012, 02:01:33 PM »
bhayee jab koe sher kahtaa hai to.... apne khyal pe kahtaa hai... na ki doosre k khyaal se Usual Smile

ab aap kahe ki sahraa main sirf dryness ni hota aur bhi kuch hota hai.... to ye to ajeeb baat huee.......... ab maine sher mai kya kahna hai ye to mai taye karungaa aur sher ka mafhoom kya hai....

ab ye bhi baat clear karUn ... to shayri ya mujhe nahi karni chaiye yaa apko nahi

sher ka maanhi sher se nikalaa jata hai. na ki usme apnaa khyaal thop diyaa jata hai .........

\sher yun hai ki

rone lagi kuch aise jyuN daryaa mai ho ufaan .

yaha mai daryaa ke ufaan ki bata kar raha hun....

chupchaap dekhtaa raha sahra hua sa main

aur yaha ye ki mai use ek mare hue sookhe hue registaan sa dekhtaa raha ........

ab aap isme apne hi khayal dal de to ye to jydadti hai..shayar ke sath hai ki nahi...

buraa manne ki baat nahi hai... mujeh pata hai kiski bata ka kitna asar lena hai...




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sahi farmayaa huzur aapne..aap jo bhi likhein wo aap jaantey hongey. lekin open thread mein jab koi bhi comments karta hai wo apni samajh se karta hai.

 waisey bhi aam aadmi key banisbat rindo.n ko zaahid key baat ka asar hota hai. aur main zaahid nahin hoon. Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile Usual Smile
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«Reply #23 on: September 05, 2012, 04:11:00 PM »
bahut bahut sunder


shukriyaa sahab
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«Reply #24 on: September 05, 2012, 04:12:46 PM »
Jabardast ghajal hai.
wah wah wah
aap to khoobsurat likhne vaalo me se ek hai..aapka intjaar rahta hai mujhe. post ke saath apna naam suffix karenge to sahooliyat hogi padhne me.



shukriyaa ji .,,.

mera naam vikas hai vikas rana:) fikr mera takhaluss hai Usual Smile
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«Reply #25 on: September 05, 2012, 04:13:37 PM »
wah kya khoob likha hai aapne  Applause Applause Applause


thanks for ur comment ,.,,,
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