jaate Jaate !!!!

by deepika_divya on September 19, 2010, 03:11:53 PM
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Maine kaha Unse ji Jaate Waqt Mujhe Saath le Jana
Unhone Kaha Abhi waqt Aaane do fir le  jaunga " Divya "
Maine Unne Roka Nahi , Kahan Jaldi Lout ke Aana
Par Unhone Meri Baaton ko Andekha sa Kar Diya  !!!

Socha Saath Jaatein Waqt Kuch Kehna Nahi Chahte
Iss Ankh mea Anso , lobo hasi le Unko Jaane Diya...
Par saal guzar gaye... Woh Nahi Aaye Laut Kar
Poocha unse tho Kahan Unhone,,,Maine koi Vada nahi kiya !!

Mano Tham si gai thi Meri Saansein.. Unki Is Baat se
Aur Unhone Kuch Kahe begair Mera Phone kaat Diya
Kanjar ki Chuban Leke Main Pal Pal Marti Rahi....
Phone aaya unka kaha Mujhe bhool jana Meri " Divya"

Ankhon Mein Ansoo Aur Labo Pe Hasi chalak Padi
Ansoon ko Tha Jaise Maine Gum mea Mila pee Liya
Hasti rahi Pagalo ki Tarah Kuch pal ke liye iss Tarah
Ke Khambhakt Ne jaate -2 "Meri" keh Seene ko Chali kar diya !!!

~Divya ~



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«Reply #1 on: September 19, 2010, 04:57:43 PM »



Nice Creation.... Font ka Colour dusraa rakhte toh padhne me jyadaa subhidhaa rehti... maine chaahunga ... aap isse dubaaraa se post kareN....
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«Reply #2 on: September 19, 2010, 07:57:48 PM »
Sophi Jee Aadaab!

Bahut achche ahsaas kahe hai aapne aur is andaaz se kahe hai ke dil ko tees si lagne lagi thi.. bahut umdaa... Behad touchi kaha hai aapne.. Realy mindblowing... Usual Smile

Aap writting meiN bhi post kariye niche padhne meiN aasaani jaati... Usual Smile

Likhate rahiye....
Khush rahiye....
Khuda Hafez.... Usual Smile

         

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«Reply #3 on: September 19, 2010, 08:13:51 PM »
Bahut bahut khoobsurti se likha hai aapne Divya ji... ek ek shabd dard bayaan kar raha hai... bahut bahut khoob likha hai aapne....

 Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

kuch koshshish ki humne bhi likhne ki... aap jaisa achcha to nahi likh sakte par aapka likha padh ke ek ichcha hui ki kuch likhen.... aur bas keyboard pe ungliyaan chala di humne...!!!



aankhen bichhaaye baithi ho jaane kabse apne piya ke liye,
raahen sooni hai, aur ghadiyaan ruk si gayi hain unke liye,
wo ayenege iska aetbaar shayad tumhe aaj bhi hai magar,
dil kehta hai tumhaara ki chhod gaye hain wo sada ke liye,

jo chhod jaate hain saath kabhi milte nahi dobaara humse,
umra beet jaati hai apni par mil nahi paate hain hum unse,
kya huwa agar unhe tumhaare ehsaason ki kadar nahi hai aaj,
duniya badi hai, kai mil jaayenge jo mohabbat karenge tumse,

kyun kisi aese ke liye apne motiyon jaise aansoo bahaate ho,
kisi paththar dil insaan ke liye kyun bewajah pyaar lutaate ho,
aayega nahi ab laut ke, khush hai wo apne khushiyon ke jahaan me,
kyun aaj bhi tum uske naam ke geet is tarha hothon pe sajaate ho,

duniya bahut badi hai mere dost, koi apna mil ji jaayega tumhe,
jo samjhega tumhaari chahat ko aur khudse badh ke chaahega tumhe,
wo itna pyaar dega tumhe ki tum bhool jaaogi duniya ki har baat,
apne dil me basaake rakhega aur baahon me bharke rakhega tumhe...
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«Reply #4 on: September 19, 2010, 11:21:57 PM »
Bhut hi ache se feelings byan ki hai ........

Baat sdihe dil taak poonchi ......

Kapil very very gud reply .............

Gud job both of u

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«Reply #5 on: September 20, 2010, 05:07:22 AM »
Nice Creation.... Font ka Colour dusraa rakhte toh padhne me jyadaa subhidhaa rehti... maine chaahunga ... aap isse dubaaraa se post kareN....


Thanks Naresh Ji... Thanks a Lot...

I have tried different colors of Font ... Bahoot Pressure de rahe the Eyes pe... Except this Black color...

Waise maine Post neeche bhi kar diya... Those who are not able to read can read from below text. !!!
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«Reply #6 on: September 20, 2010, 05:09:22 AM »
Sophi Jee Aadaab!

Bahut achche ahsaas kahe hai aapne aur is andaaz se kahe hai ke dil ko tees si lagne lagi thi.. bahut umdaa... Behad touchi kaha hai aapne.. Realy mindblowing... Usual Smile

Aap writting meiN bhi post kariye niche padhne meiN aasaani jaati... Usual Smile

Likhate rahiye....
Khush rahiye....
Khuda Hafez.... Usual Smile

         



Aapka Bahoot Bahoot Shukriya.. Parwaaz ji... Bahoot Bahoot Shukriya... Pasand karne ke liye... !!!

Maine Neeche Normal way mein Bhi POst Kar diya hai !!
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«Reply #7 on: September 20, 2010, 05:10:45 AM »
Bahut bahut khoobsurti se likha hai aapne Divya ji... ek ek shabd dard bayaan kar raha hai... bahut bahut khoob likha hai aapne....

 Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

kuch koshshish ki humne bhi likhne ki... aap jaisa achcha to nahi likh sakte par aapka likha padh ke ek ichcha hui ki kuch likhen.... aur bas keyboard pe ungliyaan chala di humne...!!!



aankhen bichhaaye baithi ho jaane kabse apne piya ke liye,
raahen sooni hai, aur ghadiyaan ruk si gayi hain unke liye,
wo ayenege iska aetbaar shayad tumhe aaj bhi hai magar,
dil kehta hai tumhaara ki chhod gaye hain wo sada ke liye,

jo chhod jaate hain saath kabhi milte nahi dobaara humse,
umra beet jaati hai apni par mil nahi paate hain hum unse,
kya huwa agar unhe tumhaare ehsaason ki kadar nahi hai aaj,
duniya badi hai, kai mil jaayenge jo mohabbat karenge tumse,

kyun kisi aese ke liye apne motiyon jaise aansoo bahaate ho,
kisi paththar dil insaan ke liye kyun bewajah pyaar lutaate ho,
aayega nahi ab laut ke, khush hai wo apne khushiyon ke jahaan me,
kyun aaj bhi tum uske naam ke geet is tarha hothon pe sajaate ho,

duniya bahut badi hai mere dost, koi apna mil ji jaayega tumhe,
jo samjhega tumhaari chahat ko aur khudse badh ke chaahega tumhe,
wo itna pyaar dega tumhe ki tum bhool jaaogi duniya ki har baat,
apne dil me basaake rakhega aur baahon me bharke rakhega tumhe...



Thank you so much for such Nice Appreciation.. Thank you so so Much

Waah Waah Kya baat hai Kapil Ji... bahoot Bahoot Uma Aur kya Kamaal ka Likha hai.. Bahoot Khoob!
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«Reply #8 on: September 20, 2010, 05:11:59 AM »
Bhut hi ache se feelings byan ki hai ........

Baat sdihe dil taak poonchi ......

Kapil very very gud reply .............

Gud job both of u



Thank you so so so Much Neel gold... Thank you !!!!
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«Reply #9 on: September 20, 2010, 08:36:24 AM »




Maine kaha Unse ji Jaate Waqt Mujhe Saath le Jana
Unhone Kaha Abhi waqt Aaane do fir le  jaunga " Divya "
Maine Unne Roka Nahi , Kahan Jaldi Lout ke Aana
Par Unhone Meri Baaton ko Andekha sa Kar Diya  !!!

Socha Saath Jaatein Waqt Kuch Kehna Nahi Chahte
Iss Ankh mea Anso , lobo hasi le Unko Jaane Diya...
Par saal guzar gaye... Woh Nahi Aaye Laut Kar
Poocha unse tho Kahan Unhone,,,Maine koi Vada nahi kiya !!

Mano Tham si gai thi Meri Saansein.. Unki Is Baat se
Aur Unhone Kuch Kahe begair Mera Phone kaat Diya
Kanjar ki Chuban Leke Main Pal Pal Marti Rahi....
Phone aaya unka kaha Mujhe bhool jana Meri " Divya"

Ankhon Mein Ansoo Aur Labo Pe Hasi chalak Padi
Ansoon ko Tha Jaise Maine Gum mea Mila pee Liya
Hasti rahi Pagalo ki Tarah Kuch pal ke liye iss Tarah
Ke Khambhakt Ne jaate -2 "Meri" keh Seene ko Chali kar diya !!!

~Divya ~





Bahut bahut bahut Khoob Sophi..

Har Lafz Apne Hisse Ki kahani Kehta Hua...Dard Mein Doobi Aapki yeh Nazm Jazbaati Aur Gehri hai..Khuda kare Aisa Pal Mohabbat Mein Kisi Ko naseeb Na Ho.

bahut Ache Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #10 on: September 20, 2010, 10:21:49 AM »
Sunder bhavon se ott-prot kavita hai aapki...Divya-di....
Lagta hai jaise ye tou har aam ladki ki kahaani hai... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Bhawron ka har kali se hota hai waada
Laut kar phir aauunga he pakka iraada

Duniya k gulshano me bhatak jaata hai wo
Waade jo kiye they sab bhul jaata hai wo

Nayee-nayi kaliyon k sang athkheliyon me
Ram-jaata hai usska jiya un saheliyon me

Hum karte rehte hain intezaar harjaai ka
Wo bhul ke humko ho gaya kisi paraayi ka

Chhedta hai ab bhi humko wo apna keh kar
Bulata hai aaj bhi mujhe "pyaari Koyal" keh kar








Maine kaha Unse ji Jaate Waqt Mujhe Saath le Jana
Unhone Kaha Abhi waqt Aaane do fir le  jaunga " Divya "
Maine Unne Roka Nahi , Kahan Jaldi Lout ke Aana
Par Unhone Meri Baaton ko Andekha sa Kar Diya  !!!

Socha Saath Jaatein Waqt Kuch Kehna Nahi Chahte
Iss Ankh mea Anso , lobo hasi le Unko Jaane Diya...
Par saal guzar gaye... Woh Nahi Aaye Laut Kar
Poocha unse tho Kahan Unhone,,,Maine koi Vada nahi kiya !!

Mano Tham si gai thi Meri Saansein.. Unki Is Baat se
Aur Unhone Kuch Kahe begair Mera Phone kaat Diya
Kanjar ki Chuban Leke Main Pal Pal Marti Rahi....
Phone aaya unka kaha Mujhe bhool jana Meri " Divya"

Ankhon Mein Ansoo Aur Labo Pe Hasi chalak Padi
Ansoon ko Tha Jaise Maine Gum mea Mila pee Liya
Hasti rahi Pagalo ki Tarah Kuch pal ke liye iss Tarah
Ke Khambhakt Ne jaate -2 "Meri" keh Seene ko Chali kar diya !!!

~Divya ~




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«Reply #11 on: September 20, 2010, 06:41:33 PM »
thank you so much Neel ji....!!!

Bhut hi ache se feelings byan ki hai ........

Baat sdihe dil taak poonchi ......

Kapil very very gud reply .............

Gud job both of u


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«Reply #12 on: September 20, 2010, 06:43:40 PM »
U are welcome Divya ji... aur hamaari poem ko pasand karne ke liye main aapka tahe dil se shukriya adaa karta hoon.....!!!


Thank you so much for such Nice Appreciation.. Thank you so so Much

Waah Waah Kya baat hai Kapil Ji... bahoot Bahoot Uma Aur kya Kamaal ka Likha hai.. Bahoot Khoob!
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«Reply #13 on: September 20, 2010, 06:50:17 PM »
Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Bahut bahut khoob likha hai aapne Koyal...!!!


Sunder bhavon se ott-prot kavita hai aapki...Divya-di....
Lagta hai jaise ye tou har aam ladki ki kahaani hai... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Bhawron ka har kali se hota hai waada
Laut kar phir aauunga he pakka iraada

Duniya k gulshano me bhatak jaata hai wo
Waade jo kiye they sab bhul jaata hai wo

Nayee-nayi kaliyon k sang athkheliyon me
Ram-jaata hai usska jiya un saheliyon me

Hum karte rehte hain intezaar harjaai ka
Wo bhul ke humko ho gaya kisi paraayi ka

Chhedta hai ab bhi humko wo apna keh kar
Bulata hai aaj bhi mujhe "pyaari Koyal" keh kar




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«Reply #14 on: September 21, 2010, 07:04:39 AM »
Thanks a lot Kapil..... icon_flower

Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Bahut bahut khoob likha hai aapne Koyal...!!!


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