Kahani

by vinery on August 08, 2015, 05:14:03 PM
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Khushboo ki jawaani nahi hoti
Kisi kisi ki kahani nahi hoti
Kuch logon ko kabhi pyaar nahi milta
Apna keh sake aisa yaar nahi milta
Saans lene se pehle hawaa ruk jati hai
Maut aane se pehle zindagi ruth jaati hai
Aise logon ki kahani nahi hoti
Kuch kuch logon ki jawaani nahi hoti.
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«Reply #1 on: August 08, 2015, 05:46:28 PM »
 Applause Applause
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«Reply #2 on: August 08, 2015, 08:01:19 PM »
Pooja Jee bahut hee khoobsurat peskash hai waah.
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«Reply #3 on: August 09, 2015, 06:21:19 AM »
पूजा जी अति सुंदर रचना
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«Reply #4 on: August 09, 2015, 06:48:05 AM »
very well said.... Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #5 on: August 09, 2015, 09:54:06 AM »
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bohat khubsurat rachna pooja g dheroooo,n daaaaaddddd or rau
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«Reply #6 on: August 09, 2015, 03:53:33 PM »
Thank you so much amit ji, surindarn ji, rastogi ji, soudagar ji and jeet ji.
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«Reply #7 on: August 10, 2015, 05:20:17 AM »
पूजा जी ,अगर आप माने तो एक सुझाव/करेक्शन बताऊ,आप अपनी उपरोक्त रचना की दूसरी पंक्ति को इस प्रकार लिखे "किसी किसी की कभी कोई कहानी नही होती" इस पंक्ति में पूर्ण रूप से अनुप्राश अलंकार भी आ गया,मात्राये भी पूरी हो गई और गीत के एक लअ भी बन गई
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«Reply #8 on: August 10, 2015, 03:47:49 PM »
पूजा जी ,अगर आप माने तो एक सुझाव/करेक्शन बताऊ,आप अपनी उपरोक्त रचना की दूसरी पंक्ति को इस प्रकार लिखे "किसी किसी की कभी कोई कहानी नही होती" इस पंक्ति में पूर्ण रूप से अनुप्राश अलंकार भी आ गया,मात्राये भी पूरी हो गई और गीत के एक लअ भी बन गई
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Aapki baat sahi hai, Rastogi ji!
Thank you so much.
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