Kaisi Ye Daastan ______________ {Angel}

by angel4u on June 24, 2009, 03:07:17 PM
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Ye ek aise insaan ki kahani hai, jisne hamesha har mod par galtiyan ki, thokarein khane ke bawajood wohi ki wohi galtiyaan ki, phir bhi uske kareeb ek shakhs tha jo hamesha uske saath raha, har mod pe, har imtehaan ke samay uska haath thaame chalta raha... par jab us insaanko ye ehsaas hua ke zindagi ka sabse ahem hissa uske liye wo shakhs ban gaya hai tab tak bahut bahut der ho chuki thi...



Ek Din Chalte Chalte Mila Ajnabi Banke Yunhi Raahon Mein,
Bhatak Raha Tha Wo Bhi Tanha Sa Gumnaam Si Kuch Chaahon Mein,

Bhola Sa Tha, Jiski Palkein Shararat Se Uthti Thi Har Baar,
Thi Ek Masoomiyat Jhalakti Hui Uski Alhad Si Baaton Mein,

Dekhte Dekhte Ban Gaya Wo Kab Na Jaane Aadat Hamare Jeene Ki,
Dosti Hai Ya Kuch Aur Doob Jaate The Hum Inhi Sochon Mein,

Jab Rahu Udaas To Khoob Manata, Mujhe Kuch Is Tarah Samjhata Tha,
Kehta Tha Har Gam Chura Lunga Jo Hai Teri Aankhon Ki Namiyon Mein,

Kuch Kehti Thi Uski Nazrein Shayad Par Samajh Nai Pate The Hum,
Kya Kehna Tha Use Kyon Laata Tha Wo Khalish Iqraaron Mein,

Isike Darmiyaan Ghulte Milte Rahe Hum Matlabi Logon Se,
Jinhone Dhoka Deke Bas Chhoda Hamein Ashqon Ki Dhaaron Mein,

Tab Bhi Kehta Raha Wo Ke Gam Na Kar Is Bedard Duniya Ka,
Main Sath Hoon Tere Chaand Ki Chaadni Aur Suraj Ki Tapishon Mein,

Mere Har Dard Ko Sehla Kar Usne Apni Chahat Ka Marham Diya,
Dekh Nahi Paayi Meri Bojhal Aankhein Wo Dard Uski Aankhon Mein,

Deke Gulaab Keha Usne Ek Din "Tu Rahi Mere Liye Bas Is Jaisi,
Waada Raha Iske Kaante Saja Lunga Main Apni Qismaton Mein",

Kyon Ye Shakhs Raha Mere Qareeb Itna Kya Rishta Raha Usse,
Sama Gaya Kyon Wohi Chehra Mere Dilke Hare Ek Jawabon Mein,

Ek Din Dheere Se Kaha Usne Ke Ho Chala Hoon Main Ab Kisi Aur Ka,
Meri Amanat Thi Jo Teri Muskurahat, Na Sonpna Ise Matlabi Haathon Mein,

Ye Sunke Bas Jaise Sehem Sa Gaya Mere Wajood Ki Ye Qaayenaat,
Tab Pata Chala Kya Ehmiyat Hoti Hia Shabdon Ki Iqraaron Mein,

Lafz Bhi The Bezubaan Kaise Puchte Uske Jaane Ki Wajah Usse,
Mehsoos Hua Ke Kho Diya Ek Anmol Heera Pattharon Ki Bheedon Mein,

Ab Bhi Hai Ummeed Na Jaane Kyon Uski Khamosh Si Mohabbat Ki,
Meri Rooh Bhi Sona Chahe Bas Uske Paak Daaman Ki Panahon Mein,

Yaqeen Hai Us Khuda Pe, Likha Hia Wo Meri Qismaton Mein Zaroor,
Ye Sochke Dhundti Hun Ab Bhiuska Saath Apne Haathon Ki Laqeeron Mein,

Naseebon Ki Bewafaiyon Ki Khatir Agar Chal Na Sake Wo Mere Saath,
Dua Karte Hai Har Pal Ke Maut Aaye Bas Uski Mehfooz Baahon Mein,

Ya Khuda! Meri Kuch Achhaiyon Ka Sila Kuch Is Tarha Se Dena Mujhe,
Mujhe Qafan Odhaye Wo, Mere Qabr Ki Pehli Mitti Ho Uske Haathon Mein,

Diya Jo Phool Tha Us Waqt Usne, Sonp Dein Use Bas Itni Mohlat Dena,
Khuda Ya! Phir Chahe Har Ek Dard Likh Dena Mere Aakhri Azaabon Mein...
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«Reply #1 on: June 24, 2009, 03:21:02 PM »
Waah Huzaina Sis, Koot Koot Ke Bhara Hai Aapne Ek Aisi Kahaani Ko, Jo Dil Tak Utarti Hai,.
Bohat Achche JI,.
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«Reply #2 on: June 24, 2009, 04:12:48 PM »
Hmmm sahi hai... Ekdam bhari mann se likha hia...

Thanks for liking bro...
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«Reply #3 on: June 24, 2009, 05:02:06 PM »
No word left for me to comment on your creation.. its Simply Mind blowing.. full of pain and emotions.. Good Work Sweetheart!
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«Reply #4 on: June 24, 2009, 05:14:08 PM »
Oh... THank you so much Sweets...

Thanks for liking and appreciating... mujhe laga itna lamba hia kaun padhega... sad5
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«Reply #5 on: June 24, 2009, 08:51:27 PM »
Ye ek aise insaan ki kahani hai, jisne hamesha har mod par galtiyan ki, thokarein khane ke bawajood wohi ki wohi galtiyaan ki, phir bhi uske kareeb ek shakhs tha jo hamesha uske saath raha, har mod pe, har imtehaan ke samay uska haath thaame chalta raha... par jab us insaanko ye ehsaas hua ke zindagi ka sabse ahem hissa uske liye wo shakhs ban gaya hai tab tak bahut bahut der ho chuki thi...



Ek Din Chalte Chalte Mila Ajnabi Banke Yunhi Raahon Mein,
Bhatak Raha Tha Wo Bhi Tanha Sa Gumnaam Si Kuch Chaahon Mein,

Bhola Sa Tha, Jiski Palkein Shararat Se Uthti Thi Har Baar,
Thi Ek Masoomiyat Jhalakti Hui Uski Alhad Si Baaton Mein,

Dekhte Dekhte Ban Gaya Wo Kab Na Jaane Aadat Hamare Jeene Ki,
Dosti Hai Ya Kuch Aur Doob Jaate The Hum Inhi Sochon Mein,

Jab Rahu Udaas To Khoob Manata, Mujhe Kuch Is Tarah Samjhata Tha,
Kehta Tha Har Gam Chura Lunga Jo Hai Teri Aankhon Ki Namiyon Mein,

Kuch Kehti Thi Uski Nazrein Shayad Par Samajh Nai Pate The Hum,
Kya Kehna Tha Use Kyon Laata Tha Wo Khalish Iqraaron Mein,

Isike Darmiyaan Ghulte Milte Rahe Hum Matlabi Logon Se,
Jinhone Dhoka Deke Bas Chhoda Hamein Ashqon Ki Dhaaron Mein,

Tab Bhi Kehta Raha Wo Ke Gam Na Kar Is Bedard Duniya Ka,
Main Sath Hoon Tere Chaand Ki Chaadni Aur Suraj Ki Tapishon Mein,

Mere Har Dard Ko Sehla Kar Usne Apni Chahat Ka Marham Diya,
Dekh Nahi Paayi Meri Bojhal Aankhein Wo Dard Uski Aankhon Mein,

Deke Gulaab Keha Usne Ek Din "Tu Rahi Mere Liye Bas Is Jaisi,
Waada Raha Iske Kaante Saja Lunga Main Apni Qismaton Mein",

Kyon Ye Shakhs Raha Mere Qareeb Itna Kya Rishta Raha Usse,
Sama Gaya Kyon Wohi Chehra Mere Dilke Hare Ek Jawabon Mein,

Ek Din Dheere Se Kaha Usne Ke Ho Chala Hoon Main Ab Kisi Aur Ka,
Meri Amanat Thi Jo Teri Muskurahat, Na Sonpna Ise Matlabi Haathon Mein,

Ye Sunke Bas Jaise Sehem Sa Gaya Mere Wajood Ki Ye Qaayenaat,
Tab Pata Chala Kya Ehmiyat Hoti Hia Shabdon Ki Iqraaron Mein,

Lafz Bhi The Bezubaan Kaise Puchte Uske Jaane Ki Wajah Usse,
Mehsoos Hua Ke Kho Diya Ek Anmol Heera Pattharon Ki Bheedon Mein,

Ab Bhi Hai Ummeed Na Jaane Kyon Uski Khamosh Si Mohabbat Ki,
Meri Rooh Bhi Sona Chahe Bas Uske Paak Daaman Ki Panahon Mein,

Yaqeen Hai Us Khuda Pe, Likha Hia Wo Meri Qismaton Mein Zaroor,
Ye Sochke Dhundti Hun Ab Bhiuska Saath Apne Haathon Ki Laqeeron Mein,

Naseebon Ki Bewafaiyon Ki Khatir Agar Chal Na Sake Wo Mere Saath,
Dua Karte Hai Har Pal Ke Maut Aaye Bas Uski Mehfooz Baahon Mein,

Ya Khuda! Meri Kuch Achhaiyon Ka Sila Kuch Is Tarha Se Dena Mujhe,
Mujhe Qafan Odhaye Wo, Mere Qabr Ki Pehli Mitti Ho Uske Haathon Mein,

Diya Jo Phool Tha Us Waqt Usne, Sonp Dein Use Bas Itni Mohlat Dena,
Khuda Ya! Phir Chahe Har Ek Dard Likh Dena Mere Aakhri Azaabon Mein...


Angel.Iss Nazm Ki tareef Mein Kuch Keh paau,Itne Lafz Nahi Mere Paas...Par har Ek Lafz Mein Dard Ki Ek Pukaar Si thi...Bahut Dard Aur Gehre Jazbaton Se Bhari Nazm Hai Yeh ,Bas Shart Yeh hai Ke Iss Nazm Ko Uss Ehsaas Se Padha Jaaye,Jis Ehsaas Ke Saath Aapne Yeh Likha Hai..

Bahut Bahut Bhaut Khoob Mere Dost!!

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«Reply #6 on: June 24, 2009, 09:15:12 PM »
Huzena,Aapne Itna Acha Likha Hai Ke Bin kuch Likhe Yaha Se Jaana Namumkin Sa Ho Gaya Hai...Kuch Instant Sa Jawaab Dene Ki Koshish Kar Raha Hoon..Umeed Hai Aapko Aur sabko Yeh Pasand Aaye...

Zubaan Khamosh Bhi Ho To,
Nazrein Bahut Kuch Keh Sakti Hai..

Sirf Dard Mein Aankhein Nam Nahi Hoti Eh Dost!!!
Teri Khushi Ke Sadke Bhi,Aankhein Meri Beh Sakti Hai....


Sirf Dooriyon Mein Insaan Door Nahi Hota "Huzena"
Kabhi-Kabhi Bahut Nazdikiyan Bhi,Do Dilon Mein Dooriyan Ban Ke Reh Sakti Hai...

Dekhte-Dekhte Woh Ajnabi Kyon Apna Sa Ban Gaya "Khwaish"??
Uski Judai Yeh Dhadkane, Ab Nahi Seh Sakti hai....

Tumne Kabhi Suune Ki Koshish Hi Na Ki,
Khamoshiyan Bhi Bahut Kuch Keh Sakti Hai.....
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«Reply #7 on: June 24, 2009, 11:34:55 PM »
Well done Ms Angel, bravo!
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«Reply #8 on: June 25, 2009, 12:42:43 AM »
Wah wah Angel ji and Khwaish ji,very very nice and beautiful creation. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley excellent.
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«Reply #9 on: June 25, 2009, 11:02:41 AM »
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Very beautiful indeed..har lafz main dard aur chahat ka ehsaas...bohot bohot achcha likha hai...par bohot dard se bhara.......Bohot Bohot Khoob Sweetie
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«Reply #10 on: June 25, 2009, 11:03:17 AM »
Khwaish, aapne bhi bohot achcha reply likha hai  icon_thumleft

Bohot khoob Dost !

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«Reply #11 on: June 25, 2009, 11:08:18 AM »
Ye ek aise insaan ki kahani hai, jisne hamesha har mod par galtiyan ki, thokarein khane ke bawajood wohi ki wohi galtiyaan ki, phir bhi uske kareeb ek shakhs tha jo hamesha uske saath raha, har mod pe, har imtehaan ke samay uska haath thaame chalta raha... par jab us insaanko ye ehsaas hua ke zindagi ka sabse ahem hissa uske liye wo shakhs ban gaya hai tab tak bahut bahut der ho chuki thi...



Ek Din Chalte Chalte Mila Ajnabi Banke Yunhi Raahon Mein,
Bhatak Raha Tha Wo Bhi Tanha Sa Gumnaam Si Kuch Chaahon Mein,

Bhola Sa Tha, Jiski Palkein Shararat Se Uthti Thi Har Baar,
Thi Ek Masoomiyat Jhalakti Hui Uski Alhad Si Baaton Mein,

Dekhte Dekhte Ban Gaya Wo Kab Na Jaane Aadat Hamare Jeene Ki,
Dosti Hai Ya Kuch Aur Doob Jaate The Hum Inhi Sochon Mein,

Jab Rahu Udaas To Khoob Manata, Mujhe Kuch Is Tarah Samjhata Tha,
Kehta Tha Har Gam Chura Lunga Jo Hai Teri Aankhon Ki Namiyon Mein,

Kuch Kehti Thi Uski Nazrein Shayad Par Samajh Nai Pate The Hum,
Kya Kehna Tha Use Kyon Laata Tha Wo Khalish Iqraaron Mein,

Isike Darmiyaan Ghulte Milte Rahe Hum Matlabi Logon Se,
Jinhone Dhoka Deke Bas Chhoda Hamein Ashqon Ki Dhaaron Mein,

Tab Bhi Kehta Raha Wo Ke Gam Na Kar Is Bedard Duniya Ka,
Main Sath Hoon Tere Chaand Ki Chaadni Aur Suraj Ki Tapishon Mein,

Mere Har Dard Ko Sehla Kar Usne Apni Chahat Ka Marham Diya,
Dekh Nahi Paayi Meri Bojhal Aankhein Wo Dard Uski Aankhon Mein,

Deke Gulaab Keha Usne Ek Din "Tu Rahi Mere Liye Bas Is Jaisi,
Waada Raha Iske Kaante Saja Lunga Main Apni Qismaton Mein",

Kyon Ye Shakhs Raha Mere Qareeb Itna Kya Rishta Raha Usse,
Sama Gaya Kyon Wohi Chehra Mere Dilke Hare Ek Jawabon Mein,

Ek Din Dheere Se Kaha Usne Ke Ho Chala Hoon Main Ab Kisi Aur Ka,
Meri Amanat Thi Jo Teri Muskurahat, Na Sonpna Ise Matlabi Haathon Mein,

Ye Sunke Bas Jaise Sehem Sa Gaya Mere Wajood Ki Ye Qaayenaat,
Tab Pata Chala Kya Ehmiyat Hoti Hia Shabdon Ki Iqraaron Mein,

Lafz Bhi The Bezubaan Kaise Puchte Uske Jaane Ki Wajah Usse,
Mehsoos Hua Ke Kho Diya Ek Anmol Heera Pattharon Ki Bheedon Mein,

Ab Bhi Hai Ummeed Na Jaane Kyon Uski Khamosh Si Mohabbat Ki,
Meri Rooh Bhi Sona Chahe Bas Uske Paak Daaman Ki Panahon Mein,

Yaqeen Hai Us Khuda Pe, Likha Hia Wo Meri Qismaton Mein Zaroor,
Ye Sochke Dhundti Hun Ab Bhiuska Saath Apne Haathon Ki Laqeeron Mein,

Naseebon Ki Bewafaiyon Ki Khatir Agar Chal Na Sake Wo Mere Saath,
Dua Karte Hai Har Pal Ke Maut Aaye Bas Uski Mehfooz Baahon Mein,

Ya Khuda! Meri Kuch Achhaiyon Ka Sila Kuch Is Tarha Se Dena Mujhe,
Mujhe Qafan Odhaye Wo, Mere Qabr Ki Pehli Mitti Ho Uske Haathon Mein,

Diya Jo Phool Tha Us Waqt Usne, Sonp Dein Use Bas Itni Mohlat Dena,
Khuda Ya! Phir Chahe Har Ek Dard Likh Dena Mere Aakhri Azaabon Mein...

Kya kahe aapse Angel ji......kisi ka is tarah se hmari zindagi me aana aur ek pal me hame tanha chod kar chale jana...aur dil ka usi ki baaho me zindagi ki aankhiri saans ki ummid.....bahut pyara,bahut khubsurti se har lafj piroya h aapne Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #12 on: June 25, 2009, 11:18:26 AM »
Waaaaaahhh... Bahut bahut accha likha hai tumne sweetu... daastan lambi thi... magar dard bara tha.. God bless you my angel. Bahut umda likha hai tumne... Thumbs UP
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«Reply #13 on: June 25, 2009, 12:25:04 PM »
Huzena,Aapne Itna Acha Likha Hai Ke Bin kuch Likhe Yaha Se Jaana Namumkin Sa Ho Gaya Hai...Kuch Instant Sa Jawaab Dene Ki Koshish Kar Raha Hoon..Umeed Hai Aapko Aur sabko Yeh Pasand Aaye...

Zubaan Khamosh Bhi Ho To,
Nazrein Bahut Kuch Keh Sakti Hai..

Sirf Dard Mein Aankhein Nam Nahi Hoti Eh Dost!!!
Teri Khushi Ke Sadke Bhi,Aankhein Meri Beh Sakti Hai....


Sirf Dooriyon Mein Insaan Door Nahi Hota "Huzena"
Kabhi-Kabhi Bahut Nazdikiyan Bhi,Do Dilon Mein Dooriyan Ban Ke Reh Sakti Hai...

Dekhte-Dekhte Woh Ajnabi Kyon Apna Sa Ban Gaya "Khwaish"??
Uski Judai Yeh Dhadkane, Ab Nahi Seh Sakti hai....

Tumne Kabhi Suune Ki Koshish Hi Na Ki,
Khamoshiyan Bhi Bahut Kuch Keh Sakti Hai.....

bahut pyara jwab diya h aapne Khwaish ji.....
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           kabhi-kabhi bahut nazdikiyan bhi dooriyan ban k reh skti h....

           Khamoshiyan bhi bahut khuch keh skti h........bahut khub kha aapne Khwaish ji.....
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«Reply #14 on: June 25, 2009, 02:47:08 PM »
Kya Kahun Angel Dear.. Lafz Nahi hain mere paas is Nazm ki Tareef ke liye.. Dil ko Chhoo jane Wale aur Dil tak utar jane wali Alfaaz likhe hain dear... Dard Ko Lafzon me Behad Khubsoorati se Piroya hai aapne.. daad Kubool Karen dost....!! Applause Applause


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