pyaar nahi chupta

by gum on April 06, 2005, 04:53:52 PM
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Hello every1!  this is the first time i am posting some thing on the web!hope u all will appreciate it and do tell me how i can improve it


JAB RAAT KI TANHAIYA DIL BANKE DHADAKTI HAI,
YADOO KE GALICHE MEIN CHILMAN SE SARAKTI HAI,
YU! PYAAR NAHI CHUPTA PALKOO KE JHUKNE SE,
AANKHOO KE GHERAI MEIN TAHRIR CHAMAKTI HAI,
KHUSH RANG PARINDO KE LAUT AANE KE DIN AAYE,
BHICHDE HUE MILTE HAI JAB BARAF PHIGALTI HAI,
SHAURATH KE BULANDI BHI PAL BHAR KA TAMASHA HAI,
JIS DAAL PAR BATHE HO WOH BHI TOOT SAKTHI HAI  
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myheart_ursonly
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«Reply #1 on: April 06, 2005, 04:56:32 PM »
Quote from: "gum"
Hello every1!  this is the first time i am posting some thing on the web!hope you all will appreciate it and do tell me how i can improve it


JAB RAAT KI TANHAIYA DIL BANKE DHADAKTI HAI,
YADOO KE GALICHE MEIN CHILMAN SE SARAKTI HAI,
YU! PYAAR NAHI CHUPTA PALKOO KE JHUKNE SE,
AANKHOO KE GHERAI MEIN TAHRIR CHAMAKTI HAI,
KHUSH RANG PARINDO KE LAUT AANE KE DIN AAYE,
BHICHDE HUE MILTE HAI JAB BARAF PHIGALTI HAI,
SHAURATH KE BULANDI BHI PAL BHAR KA TAMASHA HAI,
JIS DAAL PAR BATHE HO WOH BHI TOOT SAKTHI HAI  



nice work gum..... keep it up and keep'em coming....
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pandit
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«Reply #2 on: April 06, 2005, 04:59:15 PM »
wah gum ji,....................
kya baat hai ji.............................?
khaas taur se last line is very nice.............................
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Meena
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«Reply #3 on: April 06, 2005, 04:59:51 PM »
Quote from: "gum"
Hello every1!  this is the first time i am posting some thing on the web!hope you all will appreciate it and do tell me how i can improve it


JAB RAAT KI TANHAIYA DIL BANKE DHADAKTI HAI,
YADOO KE GALICHE MEIN CHILMAN SE SARAKTI HAI,
YU! PYAAR NAHI CHUPTA PALKOO KE JHUKNE SE,
AANKHOO KE GHERAI MEIN TAHRIR CHAMAKTI HAI,
KHUSH RANG PARINDO KE LAUT AANE KE DIN AAYE,
BHICHDE HUE MILTE HAI JAB BARAF PHIGALTI HAI,
SHAURATH KE BULANDI BHI PAL BHAR KA TAMASHA HAI,
JIS DAAL PAR BATHE HO WOH BHI TOOT SAKTHI HAI  


arre wahhhhhhhhhhhh, yeh to bohot hi acha likha hai apne!!! keep it up! wud like to c more of ur poems!!

 :D
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pandit
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«Reply #4 on: April 06, 2005, 05:03:30 PM »
chuoaane se kaha ye dost kabhi ye pyaar chupta hai,
ye aisa mushk hai jo khooshboo deta rahta hai.(nm)................................................. ................
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waheed_rose2004
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«Reply #5 on: April 06, 2005, 05:04:30 PM »
wah!!!!!!!!!!   gum.........   really  very  nice  written......   keep  it  up...........  excellent...............
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«Reply #6 on: April 06, 2005, 05:04:55 PM »
wah....gum,bohat hi accha likha hai :D

keep writing.........................!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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«Reply #7 on: April 02, 2013, 03:22:36 AM »
So Cute.
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