Lauta de sukoon merra...Geet...

by brokenbyluv on December 25, 2010, 05:33:08 PM
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Doob k dekha hai terre ishq ki geharayi mein,
tab bhi chain kaha hai dard-e-tanhai mein,

main kyun sab k saamne apna haal-e-dil sunau,
kis kis ko main apne dil k zakham dikhau,

koi ek pal ko samjhega merri bekrari ko,
dega dilasa mujhe aur bujhayega tadap ki chingari ko,

mujhe zarurat hai terri ab kya karu main,
tu hai sirrf merra phir kyun daru main,

sab kehte hai hamara koi kal nhi hoga,
hamare milan ka kabhi koi pal nhi hoga,

milwaya hai khuda ne hamein mujhe usper aetbaar hai,
mujhe apni zindgi se kahiin zyada terri khushi se pyar hai,

main bahut taklif mein hu dard ne har taraf se merre dil ko ghera hai,
main lad rahi hu usi muqadar se jo sirrf merra hai,

tu ek baar aja merri panaho mein le jaa junoon merra,
shaamil ho ja merri zindgi mein ya lauta de mujhe sukoon merra..........
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«Reply #1 on: December 25, 2010, 05:42:49 PM »
bahoot khoob likha hai aapne ek lay jo shuru se thi aakhir tak kayam rahi,,,,,,jo ki aapki rachnaon ki visheshta hai..  Thumbs UP
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«Reply #2 on: December 25, 2010, 05:52:39 PM »
Bahut bahut shurkiya bekrar ji...
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«Reply #3 on: December 25, 2010, 06:30:26 PM »
wah Geet ji--kya khub likha aapne.
aisa laga koi apna hi dost dard e dil ki sachhai bayan kr rha ho wo bhi samne hi beth kr.
aisa feel sirf aapki rachnao se hota hai ji-- too good . aap sirf dil ki likhte ho--
bahut khubsurat nagma.
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«Reply #4 on: December 25, 2010, 06:44:11 PM »
Geet jee aapki shayri me sher kam tukbandi zyda nazar aati hai......gaur kijiye.

geharayi mein,
dard-e-tanhai mein,

sunau,
dikhau,

bekrari ko,
chingari ko,

karu main,
daru main,

kal nhi hoga,
pal nhi hoga,

aetbaar hai,
pyar hai,

ghera hai,
merra hai,

junoon merra,
sukoon merra..........

Maine pehle bhi aapko samjhane ki koshish ki hai aur aainda bhi rahegi, filhaal na aapki peshkash ko Ghazal kaha ja sakta hai na geet aur na Nazm isey agar kuch kaha ja sakta hai to sirf itna ke yeh Lafzo ki TUKBANDI hai.



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madhuwesh
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«Reply #5 on: December 25, 2010, 06:50:51 PM »
Bahut khoob Geet ji,very touching n lovely creation.hats off icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause  Applause
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ParwaaZ
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«Reply #6 on: December 25, 2010, 07:02:20 PM »
Geet Jee Aadaab!

Kafi achche ashaar kahe hai aapne..... Ahsaas o khayaal ko khoob bayaaN kiya hai.....

Ghayal sahab Ki kuch baateN bhi sahiN hai... aik kafiye ko hi puri tarha se anjaam dene ki koshish kijiye... Kalaam meiN rawaani aati hai....

Koshish jaari rakhiye....
Likhate rahiye.....
Khush O aabad rahiye.....
Khuda Hafez..... Usual Smile          

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dead heart
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«Reply #7 on: December 25, 2010, 07:36:16 PM »
Bahaut bahaut bahaut khubsoorat yeh peshkash rahi..
dil choo gayi..
dil ki baat dil sunta hai aur mehsoos karta hai..
 Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
Likte rahiyega issi andaaz main..
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brokenbyluv
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«Reply #8 on: December 25, 2010, 08:00:40 PM »
Bahut bahut shurkriya nirala ji,madhuji,parwaaz ji,sajid ji,shihab ji n rahim ji....

Sajid ji apki baat per main zarur gaur karungi..shukriya apki nasihat k liye...
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Rajesh Harish
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«Reply #9 on: December 25, 2010, 08:25:23 PM »
Bahut sundar peshkash hai aap ki Geet Ji
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«Reply #10 on: December 26, 2010, 05:38:35 AM »
Wah Kya Baat hai Geet Ji.. Kamaal LIkha hai.. ek ek lafz beintehaan khubsoorat likha hai.. Dard ko Bakhoobi Bayan kiya hai Har aapke LIkhe Har alfaaz Ne... Bahut Khoooooooob.. Daad Kubool Karen.. dil se.. Applause Applause


 Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley



**~** Mann **~**


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Rishi Agarwal
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«Reply #11 on: December 26, 2010, 10:17:58 AM »
Bahut Khub Geet Ji Aisa Lag Rha Hai
Aapne Mera Hi Dard Likha Ho... Accha Laga Padhkar.. Applause Applause

Mein To Gum Ke Andhere  Mein Ek Ek Pal Bita Rha Hu..
Aur WO Andhere Mein Bhi Apni Zindagi Ko Sawar Rahi Hai..

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brokenbyluv
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«Reply #12 on: December 26, 2010, 12:54:00 PM »
Bahut bahut shukriya rajesh ji,mann ji n rishi ji..behad khubsurat lines rishi ji...
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«Reply #13 on: December 27, 2010, 01:51:05 PM »
Bahut bahut shukriya rajesh ji,mann ji n rishi ji..behad khubsurat lines rishi ji...

Shukriya Geet JI
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«Reply #14 on: January 01, 2011, 11:34:05 AM »
Usual Smile
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