~*~ Mujhe bhi parr liya karo ~*~ by Rahim

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Salaam..

Main kuch aur likh raha tha kay Yo kay ek thread par kisi kay comments dekhe..Bahaut gussa aya mujhe aur yeh jo kuch likh baitha, pesh kar raha hoon..

Bahaut sidha aur dil se likha hai..aur gusse main likha hai..


Meri iss nazm se main janta hoon kayi logon ko aitraz hoga, mager mujhe
nahin hai..Kyun ki main sach likhta hoon..aur sach kay bare main sabse bada
sach yeh hai kay woh kadva hota hai..Phir bhi, maafi ka talabgar hoon..!

Tanz karne ko toh foran se aa jate ho,
Kabhi tariff kay do shabd keh diya karo..

Mana tum bahaut umda shayar ho yaar,
Mager mujhe bhi kabhi kabhi parr liya karo..

Mujhe gehra likhna nahin ata toh kya hua,
Shabdon main ehsaason ko mehsus kiya karo..

Dimak se likhte ho aur dimak se hi parrte ho,
Kabhi kabhi dil ka bhi istamal kar liya karo..

Tumhe bhi kisi ne pyaar se galtiyan dikhayi hongi,
Mujhe bhi mohobat bhari zuban se sudhara karo..

‘Khamosh’ unn tamam tanz karne walon se kehta hai,
Kabhi kabhi mohobat se bhi kam liya karo..

Mana tum bahaut ache shayar ho,
Mager, kabhi kabhi mujhe bhi parr liya karo..

~..Rahim..~..A Silent Heart..~
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«Reply #1 on: February 27, 2011, 10:10:27 PM »
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Dost--sabse pahle ye baat suniye ki jo sachha hota hai aur sirf sachh kahta hai--
wo sakhs kabhi abni sachhi baate kahne par Maafi nhi mangta chahe kuch bhi ho jaaye.
aap sachh likhte hain ye to mai janta hi hun--
aur aapka gussa lazimi hai.
kalaam ke through se gusse ko bahut achhi tarah se pesh kiya aapne.
be happy dear
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«Reply #2 on: February 27, 2011, 10:23:19 PM »
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Bahut Khub Rahim Bhai
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«Reply #3 on: February 27, 2011, 10:25:30 PM »
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Bahut khoob rahiim tumahri har baat se main sehmat hu...
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«Reply #4 on: February 27, 2011, 10:54:56 PM »
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dil se likhi har baat sach hoti hai rahim......
aur aaj tumne jo likha hai wo to yakeenan kuch logon k samjhne k liye hi hai...
hope wo samjh jayen.....
bht hi pyaare andaaz aur khubsurat tarike se tumne apni baat rakhi hai bhai...
yunhi likhte raho..khush raho....
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«Reply #5 on: February 27, 2011, 11:18:37 PM »
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Bahut he khaas baat kahi hai Rahim-bhai.......jaroor samajh jaayenge......hum tou aapki har post dilse padhte hain...... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #6 on: February 27, 2011, 11:36:42 PM »
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Rahim Ji .. Aadaab !

aapki rachnaa ke ehsaas ... dil ki awaaz ke saath ... kahi mann ke ghusse ko pradarshit kartaa hai ... yeh kisi lekhak ... shaayar ... yaa adaakar ke leehaaz se theek nahi lagta ... hum jo kuch likhte hai ... jab use saarvjanik karte hai ... toh use padhne wala achchaa yaa kharaab bataayega ... yeh toh sobhaavik hai ... jab woh achche ki taareef karne kaa huqe rakhte hai ... tab aalochnaa kaa adhikaar bhi unkaa hai ... isme ghussa hone ki baat samajh nahi aati ... !

varnaa publish rachnaaoN ki samiikshaa aur aalochnaa ki phir zarurat kaha reh jaati hai ... jab har likhe ki taareef hi karni hai toh ... haa lekin aalochnaa rachnaatmak honi chaahiye ... mazaak nahi ... !  agar aalochnaa rachnaatmak ho toh likhne waale me humeshaa nikhaar laati hai ... likhne waale ko kabhi aalochnaa se ghussaa nahi hona chaahiye ... balki seekhna chaahiye ... yadi koi sahi samiikshaa karta hai toh ... !

yeh sirf mere apne vichaar hai .... zaruri nahi aap isse sehmat ho ... agar kuch galat keh gaya hoon toh muafi chaahungaa ... isme koi shaq nahi aapki adhikaansh rachnaayeN bahut badiya hoti hai ... maine jahaa tak aapko padhaa hai ... uss adhaar par keh raha hoon ... !

aise hi likhte rahen aage bhi ... kush rahen ... !

apnaa thiik se khayaal rakhen ... !
duaaoN ke saath ... !
  
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«Reply #7 on: February 28, 2011, 06:41:00 PM »
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Dost--sabse pahle ye baat suniye ki jo sachha hota hai aur sirf sachh kahta hai--
wo sakhs kabhi abni sachhi baate kahne par Maafi nhi mangta chahe kuch bhi ho jaaye.
aap sachh likhte hain ye to mai janta hi hun--
aur aapka gussa lazimi hai.
kalaam ke through se gusse ko bahut achhi tarah se pesh kiya aapne.
be happy dear
Bahut Khub Rahim Bhai
Rishi bhai aur Nirala dost..
Teh teh dil se shukriya..!
Khush rahiye..!
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«Reply #8 on: February 28, 2011, 06:42:44 PM »
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Bahut khoob rahiim tumahri har baat se main sehmat hu...
dil se likhi har baat sach hoti hai rahim......
aur aaj tumne jo likha hai wo to yakeenan kuch logon k samjhne k liye hi hai...
hope wo samjh jayen.....
bht hi pyaare andaaz aur khubsurat tarike se tumne apni baat rakhi hai bhai...
yunhi likhte raho..khush raho....
Bahut he khaas baat kahi hai Rahim-bhai.......jaroor samajh jaayenge......hum tou aapki har post dilse padhte hain...... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
Apas..
Apka teh teh dil se shukriya iss saath kay liye..
Khush rahiye..!
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«Reply #9 on: February 28, 2011, 06:43:49 PM »
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Bahut Khub Rahim Bhai


Khush Rahiye...

~Shihab~
Teh teh dil se shukriya Shihab bhai..
Khush rahiye..!
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«Reply #10 on: February 28, 2011, 06:44:02 PM »
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good one rahim....
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«Reply #11 on: February 28, 2011, 06:45:54 PM »
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Naresh bhai,

Mera kehna unke liye nahin tha jo tariff bhi karte hai aur criticism bhi..Meri yeh nazm unke liye hai jo sirf tanz karne ate hai..Jo dil se tariff toh nahin kar sakte bas dil se tanz karte phirte hai..Likhayi main bas galtiyan dhundte hai..yeh unke liye tha..

Har uske liye nahin jo burayi karte hai..

Apka shukriya..
Khush rahiye..!
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«Reply #12 on: February 28, 2011, 08:54:04 PM »
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Salaam..

Main kuch aur likh raha tha kay Yo kay ek thread par kisi kay comments dekhe..Bahaut gussa aya mujhe aur yeh jo kuch likh baitha, pesh kar raha hoon..

Bahaut sidha aur dil se likha hai..aur gusse main likha hai..


Meri iss nazm se main janta hoon kayi logon ko aitraz hoga, mager mujhe
nahin hai..Kyun ki main sach likhta hoon..aur sach kay bare main sabse bada
sach yeh hai kay woh kadva hota hai..Phir bhi, maafi ka talabgar hoon..!

Tanz karne ko toh foran se aa jate ho,
Kabhi tariff kay do shabd keh diya karo..

Mana tum bahaut umda shayar ho yaar,
Mager mujhe bhi kabhi kabhi parr liya karo..

Mujhe gehra likhna nahin ata toh kya hua,
Shabdon main ehsaason ko mehsus kiya karo..

Dimak se likhte ho aur dimak se hi parrte ho,
Kabhi kabhi dil ka bhi istamal kar liya karo..

Tumhe bhi kisi ne pyaar se galtiyan dikhayi hongi,
Mujhe bhi mohobat bhari zuban se sudhara karo..

‘Khamosh’ unn tamam tanz karne walon se kehta hai,
Kabhi kabhi mohobat se bhi kam liya karo..

Mana tum bahaut ache shayar ho,
Mager, kabhi kabhi mujhe bhi parr liya karo..

~..Rahim..~..A Silent Heart..~

bhai Rahim ,Jaise Ki Aapne Kaha Ke Aapne Yeh nazm Gusse mein Likha Hai, Main Sach kahoon To Mujhe iss nazm mein badi masumiyat Nazar aayi..Kisi se Gile-shikwe Dil mein Paalkar Jeena Aur Kabhi Ek choti Si Shikayat mein usse Khatam kar dena, Inn Dono Baaton mein Bahut Fark hai..Aapne Apne dil ka haal bahut khoooooooooobsurti se bayaan kiya..bahut bahut khoob!!!

Aapki Har Baat Mujhe achi tarah samaj aayi hai,umeed karta hoon iss baat ko har koi samjhe..
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«Reply #13 on: February 28, 2011, 09:03:39 PM »
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Rahim Mere Bhaiiiiiiiiii... Aapka Gussa Bilkul Jaayaz Hai.. aur aapka Likha ek ek lafz Such Hai.. Main Kadra Karta Hoon aapke Likhe in alfaazon Ki.. !!!

Aapki Is Rachna Se Zaroor Kuch Log Khud Me Sudhaar Karenge..!!  icon_thumleft icon_thumleft

Bahut Khoooooooooooob..  Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley



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«Reply #14 on: March 01, 2011, 01:04:40 AM »
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good one rahim....
Priya di teh teh dil se shukriya..!
Khush rahiye..!
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