Patte jo toote kisi ped se

by abhi bhi zinda hun on July 25, 2010, 10:50:11 AM
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Patte jo toote kisi ped se, Kahan tak urenge woh !!
Par to hote nahi hain unke, Behti hawa ka ek ishara kaafi hain !!

Raaste jo chhoote kahi door pe, Kahan kab milenge woh !!
Dard kyon sote nahi ab dil ke, Uski wafa ka ek nazara baaki hain !!

Baadal jo roothe kisi gaaon pe, Kahan ab rahenge woh !!
Mitti bhi roye bin aansoo ke, Sukhi dariya ka ek jal-dhara kaafi hain !!

Bandhan jo toote kisi baat pe, Kahan ab jootenge woh !!
Thakati kyon nahi yeh meri aankhein, Bairi mout ka ek sitara baaki hain !!
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«Reply #1 on: July 25, 2010, 12:27:46 PM »
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abzh ji....aapke likhne me alag sa kuch hai..jis tarah aap apni baat rakhte hain .ek alag si feeling hoti hai..kaisi ye samjh nahin aai lekin aaj aapki do rachna padhi aur dono hi ek ajeeb sa dard jaga gai man me....kuch hai jo bechain karta hai padhkar...

bht dard hai aapke likhne me..aur usko bayan karne ka andaaz bhi alag.... Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #2 on: July 25, 2010, 03:27:07 PM »
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Patte jo toote kisi ped se, Kahan tak urenge woh !!
Par to hote nahi hain unke, Behti hawa ka ek ishara kaafi hain !!

Raaste jo chhoote kahi door pe, Kahan kab milenge woh !!
Dard kyon sote nahi ab dil ke, Uski wafa ka ek nazara baaki hain !!

Baadal jo roothe kisi gaaon pe, Kahan ab rahenge woh !!
Mitti bhi roye bin aansoo ke, Sukhi dariya ka ek jal-dhara kaafi hain !!

Bandhan jo toote kisi baat pe, Kahan ab jootenge woh !!
Thakati kyon nahi yeh meri aankhein, Bairi mout ka ek sitara baaki hain !!

Its too good ......bahut umda khayal pesh kiye hai aapne ...bahut khoob !
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«Reply #3 on: July 25, 2010, 08:25:59 PM »
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Aap sabhi ko bahut bahut  dhanyavad.
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«Reply #4 on: July 25, 2010, 08:28:21 PM »
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abzh ji....aapke likhne me alag sa kuch hai..jis tarah aap apni baat rakhte hain .ek alag si feeling hoti hai..kaisi ye samjh nahin aai lekin aaj aapki do rachna padhi aur dono hi ek ajeeb sa dard jaga gai man me....kuch hai jo bechain karta hai padhkar...

bht dard hai aapke likhne me..aur usko bayan karne ka andaaz bhi alag.... Applause Applause Applause Applause

Dhanyvad kasak ji, Aapko babut dhanyavad. Aise dard to poore hindushtan ko hain ...koi likhne wala hi nahi hain happy9
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«Reply #5 on: July 25, 2010, 10:47:07 PM »
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Achha likha hai aapne ek alag hi andaaz me.... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause


Dard mehsoos ho tou koiee geet janme
Nire thhooth hai ab jaan kahaan inme

Kasak es dard ki tere dil main hai oouthee
Lagtaa hai mujhe ke zinda hai tu bhi abhee


Dard mehsoos ho tou koiee geet janme
Nire thhooth hai ab jaan kahaan inme

Kasak es dard ki tere dil main hai oouthee
Lagtaa hai mujhe ke zinda hai tu bhi abhee
Dhanyvad kasak ji, Aapko babut dhanyavad. Aise dard to poore hindushtan ko hain ...koi likhne wala hi nahi hain happy9

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«Reply #6 on: July 25, 2010, 10:51:50 PM »
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BAHUT ACHCHA LIKHA HAI AAPNE.BAHUT BAHUT BADHAI.......
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