Ghazal: har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii...!

by DhavalRami on August 12, 2009, 10:54:43 AM
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«Reply #15 on: August 13, 2009, 12:40:42 PM »
wah aate hi dhamal ... dhaval ji..bahut khoob...

bahut khoob shaahil bro..cara ji...pooja di...aap sab bahut acha likhe reply me...

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«Reply #16 on: August 13, 2009, 09:43:42 PM »
bahut achche dhaval saaheb zordaar entry hai aapki yoindia par aate hi deewana bana de aisi ghazal pesh kii hai ....aapke aur kalaam padne ka intzaar rahega

yoon toh har dil zazbaaton se bhara hota hai
khushi main hansta aur gham main rota hai
kabhi jab likh deta hai yeh kaagaz par dard apna
yeh zamana keh k "SHAYAR" oospe fanaa hota hai

Saahil saaHeb:

Aadaab!

Ghazal ki pasaNdagee ke liye bahot bahot ShuKriyaa'h.. aapne bhee bahot Khuub liKhaa hai ! yuuNhi saath dete raheN.. paRhte rahiYeNgaa aage bhee!

KhuSh raheN.., apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

~ Dhaval
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«Reply #17 on: August 13, 2009, 10:30:54 PM »
wah aate hi dhamal ... dhaval ji..bahut khoob...

bahut khoob shaahil bro..cara ji...pooja di...aap sab bahut acha likhe reply me...

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«Reply #18 on: August 14, 2009, 11:09:49 AM »
DhavalRami ji apne apni kavita main do bahoot gahre topic ek sath pesh kiye hai...koshish ki hai ki likhi kavita ke anusaar main bhi kuch likh saku...
Apki kavita ki pahli line laker ussi se shuru kar rahi hu...

Her shakas main ek shayar chupa hota hai
Jazbaato ka samunder kahin ander daba hota hai

Waqat per jab rah jaaye tanha insaan dunia main
Kalam ka sath he, sab se achi dawa  (medicine) hota hai

Na bhed koi shabdo se, na armaano per bandh (dam) hota hai
Insaan aor ander ke shayar ka tab sucha sath hota hai

Ishaq per kaya likhe Pooja,  shabdo mai bhi wo arth kaha
Bayan kar sake jo dil ka dard, dard to bas sirf dard hota hai


Wah Wah Pooja ji.. Bahut Hi Lajawab Alfaaz Likhe hain aapne.. Dard Ko Bakhoobi Bayan Kiya hai aapne.. Bahut Bahut Khooooob.. Applause Applause


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«Reply #19 on: August 14, 2009, 11:32:57 AM »
Bahut Bahut Khoob Dhaval Ji..

Bahut Hi Khoobsurat peshkash.. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Likhte Rahiye.. Thumbs UP


KhwaahiSh jee:

namaskaaR!

merii koShiSh ko dil se paRhne ke liye aur pasaNd karne ke liye bahot bahot ShuKriyaaH!

yuuNhi paRhte raheN aage bhee!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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«Reply #20 on: August 14, 2009, 11:35:40 AM »
Waah Bahoot BAHOOT KHOOB Daval Ji.. Bahoot hi kamal ki ghazal pesh ki hai..

Welcome to Yoindia !

Divya jee:

Kem Cho? majaamaa ?

Ghazal kii pasaNdagii ke liye bahot bahot ShuKriyaah.. saath dete raheN aage bhee!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

~ Dhaval
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«Reply #21 on: August 14, 2009, 11:37:50 AM »
Bahut Khoob Dhaval Ji. Very Good.
sammual saaHeb:

namaste!

aapne merii koShiSh ko apnaa waQt diyaa bahot achhaa lagaa.. yuuNhi paRhte raheN aage bhee!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

~ Dhaval
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«Reply #22 on: August 14, 2009, 11:40:52 AM »
Dhaval Bhaiiiiii.. Bahut Hi Umda Aur Shaandaar Peshkash hai Dost.. Behad Lajawab Jazzbaaton Ko Kaagaz par Utaara hai Dost..  icon_thumleft icon_thumleft

aapki Qalam Ke Jaadoo se Hum Pahale Hi Waakif Hain.. Mehfil Me Chaar-Chaand Laga diye hain aapki Is Rachna ne.. Bahut Bahut Khoooob Dost.. Applause Applause

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namaste!

aapkaa saath haMeShaa se milaa haii! Ooper waale se duaa yahee haii kii hamaaraa yeh saath yuuNhi banaaye raKheN.. Ghazal ko pasaNd karne ke liye maiN aapka be-Had mamnuuN huuN bhaaii.. aap sab dostoN kaa saath milaa KhuShii hu'ii!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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«Reply #23 on: August 14, 2009, 11:44:48 AM »

her ek line kamal .. magar last line.... Supper dupper dil ko chu gai... bahoot sahi kaha apne Dhaval ji..

jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii

bahoot sahi farmaya... bahoot he acha likha hai apne.. Good creation!!!

Yoindia mai apka sawagat hai!!!

Poojaa jee :

namaste!

kaise hai.n aap?

aapko meri yeh koShiSh pasaNd aayiiN jaan.K be-Had KhuShii ho rahee haii.. aapko jo Ghazal ka maq'taa pasaNd aayaa wo meraa bhee pasaNdeedaa haii poorii Ghazal meiN se

aik baar fir se ShuKriyaa'h!

bas yuuNhi saath dete raheN aage bhee! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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«Reply #24 on: August 14, 2009, 11:57:24 AM »
DhavalRami ji apne apni kavita main do bahoot gahre topic ek sath pesh kiye hai...koshish ki hai ki likhi kavita ke anusaar main bhi kuch likh saku...
Apki kavita ki pahli line laker ussi se shuru kar rahi hu...

Poojaa jee :

namaste!


yeh mere liye baRii hi KhuShii kii baat haii kii aapne apne ehsaasoN ko merii koShiSh ke saath joRaa.. !! iss sey zeyaadaah aur KhuShii kii baat kyaa ho saktee hai bhalaa!

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Her shakas main ek shayar chupa hota hai
Jazbaato ka samunder kahin ander daba hota hai

jee haaN bahot saHeeH farmaayaa aapne!! dil ke aNdar kahiiN jaZbaatoN kaa samaNdar dabaa hotaa hai ! Khuub!

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Waqat per jab rah jaaye tanha insaan dunia main
Kalam ka sath he, sab se achi dawa  (medicine) hota hai
aapki yeh soch mujhe KhaaS pasaNd aayii..! jab kalam ka saath ho to kehnaa hi kyaa!
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Na bhed koi shabdo se, na armaano per bandh (dam) hota hai
Insaan aor ander ke shayar ka tab sucha sath hota hai

Bahot Khuub Poojaa jee!

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Ishaq per kaya likhe Pooja,  shabdo mai bhi wo arth kaha
Bayan kar sake jo dil ka dard, dard to bas sirf dard hota hai

waah !! aaKhiri Sher tou dil meiN Ghar kar gayaa poojaa jee bahot hi Khuub rahaa aapka yeh Sher
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Poojaa jee:

aapne merii Ghazal ko  itani baareeqee se jo paRhaa haii.. maiN aapka mamnuun huuN! har liKhane waale kii chaahat yahee hotee hai kii har lafz paRhne waaloN ke dil pe asar kare! aur dil par gehraa asar kar jaayeN! aapne apnaa qeemtee waQt diyaa merii Ghazal ko KhuShii hu'i!

aapse darKhaaSt yahee haii kii yuuNhi paRhte raheN aage bhee ees Khaaksaar ki koShiShoN ko!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

~ Dhaval
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«Reply #25 on: August 15, 2009, 10:42:09 AM »
wah aate hi dhamal ... dhaval ji..bahut khoob...

bahut khoob shaahil bro..cara ji...pooja di...aap sab bahut acha likhe reply me...

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Punam jee:

namaste!

hausilaa'h afzA'ii ke liye bahot bahot ShuKriyaa! KhuShii hu'ii jaan.K kii aapko merii Ghazal pasaNd aayiiN!

yuuNhi saath dete raheN

KhuSh raheN.. apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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«Reply #26 on: August 16, 2009, 07:42:05 PM »
Mere Pyaare dostoN:

Namaskaar aur Aadaab!!

bazm meiN apnii ik ChhoTii sii koShiSh ke saath haaZir ho rahaa huuN... aapki qeemtee raa'ey aur sujhaavo kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa... mulaa'iizaa famaayeN...!

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har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii

bahr: darya ,samaNdar

kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii

wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa haii

maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa haii

jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii

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Bahut bahut khoobsurat likha hia aapne Dhaval Ji..

keep writing.

waiting to see more from your side.


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«Reply #27 on: August 16, 2009, 07:45:50 PM »
aise hi likhte rahiye Dhaval sahaab
yahan aapki shayari ke kadradan haath failaaye baithe hain
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«Reply #28 on: August 17, 2009, 09:57:27 AM »
Bahut bahut khoobsurat likha hia aapne Dhaval Ji..

keep writing.

waiting to see more from your side.


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Angel jee:

namaste!

Ghazal kii pasaNdagee ke liye maiN apaka mamnuun huuN.. aap sab dostoN ke saath sey aage liKhane kaa hausilaah baRhtaa hai! ShuKriyaaH!

KhuSh raheN.... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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«Reply #29 on: August 17, 2009, 09:59:57 AM »
aise hi likhte rahiye Dhaval sahaab
yahan aapki shayari ke kadradan haath failaaye baithe hain

saaHeb:

namaste!

aapkaa saath milaa mujhe be-Had KhuShii hu'ii.. aise hi paRhte rahiyeNgaa aage bhee! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

ShuKriyaaH

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

~ Dhaval
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